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The art of crafting an effective resume should be taught in school since it's so meaningful in our working lives. Most of us learned how to create our resumes from online samples and campus career-counseling handbooks, but those basic examples can only help us so much. While I'm not a professional career counselor or resume builder, I have a keen eye for resume blunders and have been helping my friends with their resumes for years. Think your resume could use a second opinion? Upload your resume without your personal information (or private message me) and I'll offer my advice on how to polish it to perfection.

A More Grown-Up Résumé, Remedied

Posted By Smart Living on May 28, 2008 at 12:32PM

TeamSugar member cherylrc is hoping to "make her résumé look more adult and less college student," and shared her résumé in my Résumé Remedy group to get some tips on how to make these improvements. She's tailoring her résumé for jobs in event planning and coordination, and she definitely isn't short of experience. From managing events at well-known restaurants to working as a self-employed wedding planner, cherylrc sure seems to know what she's doing!

  1. Be less redundant: I think she could remove the last two positions currently listed. They don't tell me anything new and simply repeat responsibilities she's had in more current positions. Instead, expand on other positions that are lacking in detail and add information to make each experience stand out. The idea is to paint a picture of overall experience that shows some connectedness between positions, while making it clear that she's grown over the years and has made an impact in each job.

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  1. Step it up: For example, she needs to explain what makes her special as a wedding planner and not just list the expected bullet points. Everyone knows that a wedding planner's job is to plan weddings, and in order to impress employers she needs to convince them of your experience — this is where her résumé will get that adult shine she's seeking. Referencing numbers like how many weddings she typically juggles during peak season, and it may be appropriate to mention well-known venues for weddings she's planned if she's applying for local jobs. Apply this mentality to each position.
  2. Share more of yourself: She should include any education after professional experience, and if she's still in school that can be shared with her expected graduation date. Also, any other affiliations like community work are welcome additions to résumés because they suggest a more well-rounded candidate.
  3. Grammar police: Pay attention to grammar and especially tense. I probably sound like a broken record in discussing the tense issue, but there's a reason for it. Your résumé is an employer's first impression of you, and the last thing you want is for them to think you may not be well spoken. So, "planning and executing weddings efficiently" should be "plan and execute weddings efficiently" because it's a current job. And in a job from 2006, "direct contact with kitchen" should instead read "directed contact with kitchen."